Late in 1989, Gwen’s and his first son, Zarathustra Amadeus, was born. In 1993, his second son, Zebulon Ulysses, was born, he toured around extensively, and moved to New Zealand, where he lectured in the Computer Science department at Waikato University.

Magic food showed up because Kevin fed some of it, despite its rarity, to Sundancer the unicorn in the chapter “Soldiers of Hell”.

In our own universe, think of the planet Mars: now a dead planet. But was it always? Perhaps it became lifeless because a God and a Demon battled atop it and destroyed its life-giving essence in the heat of their battle.

You switch between talking about goblets to moms and cookies and I’m having trouble understanding the world.

“seductive fingertips” I think you have an opportunity to describe this to convey that what he is doing is seductive rather than using a simple adjective. Remember, you want to immerse your reader into the experience rather than explain it.

“Popcorn, you fools, popcorn!” he bellowed triumphantly.

On SL4, arbitrarily high levels of rationality are permitted. If you’ve ever been shot down in a conversation for being too rational, you know what I mean.

I can laugh maniacally all I want, so long as I still get the answers right on questions of simple fact. 

But y'know, this shiny new model of Friendly AI *does not require* that I be Belldandy, or even that I *approximate* Belldandy.

If you think this is geometrically impossible all I can say is that you don’t know my life.